Another attempt... hm...
The barrow downs lie in the mist,
The wreathing wisps grasp the stones,
Call me now a pessimist
But this cold reminds of bones.
Long ago they fell beneath,
Dark the shades that crept within,
Heavy gold they shall bequeath,
Entrapping weight to stiffen.
Why did we stop, unthinking?
Now my plaintive cry resounds,
Answered only in clinking,
Far beneath the barrow downs.
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Poetry Forms - the letter A
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Beruthless
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Re: Ae Freislighe
Fresh and Crusty for a Moonflower
Mourning glory of the night
Obeying lunar calling
Occult tresses of delight
Noldor-gem's light a falling.
Vanquished verses reinstates
Imposing dire warning
Noble bowman recreates
Elven-stars fade by morning.
Mourning glory of the night
Obeying lunar calling
Occult tresses of delight
Noldor-gem's light a falling.
Vanquished verses reinstates
Imposing dire warning
Noble bowman recreates
Elven-stars fade by morning.
Puter says no!
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Silivren Ithildin
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Re: Ae Freislighe
Acrostics???? Did someone say Acrostics???? Are you sure you want to get ME started on acrostics?????
And Aragorn gave it a new name and called it Anduril, Flame of the West. FOTR
"Utúlie'n aurë! Auta i lómë!"
The Children of Húrin
"Utúlie'n aurë! Auta i lómë!"
The Children of Húrin
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Ringwraith-Wife
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Re: Ae Freislighe
FRESH MEAT
Fresh Meat?
Ringwraith-Wife said
Easy? Acrostics? not -
Silivren's dred?
Ha! Ha!
My take on this ( - give you even money -)
Easy or not *(not)*
Ae Freislighe will make - Acrostics seem funny!
Ta! Ta!
Fresh Meat?
Ringwraith-Wife said
Easy? Acrostics? not -
Silivren's dred?
Ha! Ha!
My take on this ( - give you even money -)
Easy or not *(not)*
Ae Freislighe will make - Acrostics seem funny!
Ta! Ta!
Re: Ae Freislighe
(((B'ruthless))) That is a truly beautiful poem!Beruthless wrote:Fresh and Crusty for a Moonflower
Mourning glory of the night
Obeying lunar calling
Occult tresses of delight
Noldor-gem's light a falling.
Vanquished verses reinstates
Imposing dire warning
Noble bowman recreates
Elven-stars fade by morning.
Here's one that is, well... it is in the neighbourhood of an Ae Freislighe:
Darkness Lady, loves the night
Lives with pain, but knows delight
Her lord is freedom, lawless might
Darkens lines 'tween wrong and right
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Ringwraith-Wife
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Re: Ae Freislighe
WOW!
Prim, I just read your last Ae Freislighe...
Really beautiful... talk about "setting the bar high" !!!
Also, I can't wait to see what Sil comes up with... I do so love "fresh meat" ... and this tutorial is the best! We should have lots more involvement!
Prim, I just read your last Ae Freislighe...
Really beautiful... talk about "setting the bar high" !!!
Also, I can't wait to see what Sil comes up with... I do so love "fresh meat" ... and this tutorial is the best! We should have lots more involvement!
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Beruthless
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Re: Poetry Forms - the letter A
"Answered only in clinking,
Far beneath the barrow downs"
...and my faint lines rhyming for help from Tom Bombadil as I'm overcome by the Ae Freislighe wight and his sevenly beats....
You guys are managing so nicely while I feel these Celtic knots are made of elven rope which burns.......... it burns my Precious...
Far beneath the barrow downs"
...and my faint lines rhyming for help from Tom Bombadil as I'm overcome by the Ae Freislighe wight and his sevenly beats....
You guys are managing so nicely while I feel these Celtic knots are made of elven rope which burns.......... it burns my Precious...
Puter says no!
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DoctorGamgee
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Re: Ae Freislighe
Doc is too caustic,
Rhyming Acrostics.
Given Adonic,
All is Laconic.
Maybe he'd better,
Get a new letter.
Everyone's thinkin'
'E's just plain Stinkin.
Dr.G
Rhyming Acrostics.
Given Adonic,
All is Laconic.
Maybe he'd better,
Get a new letter.
Everyone's thinkin'
'E's just plain Stinkin.
Dr.G
Proud father of G-minor and the Bean!
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Ringwraith-Wife
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Re: Ae Freislighe
Terrific, Dr.G ! ===RW
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Beruthless
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Just a thought
Was wondering when Dr Gee or Mith CQ might drop by 
Hoping your trip has not been too hard on the young Gillette.
Just a THOUGHT.
To think that we baulked at Durin's Door dactyls
----- Haiku'ed while sleeping
----- Or thanking our Primula
------Unloved we felt not.
Grudgingly picked at fresh 'inards or crusty
Hail! Fellowship of poetry.
Together we have grown.
Hoping your trip has not been too hard on the young Gillette.
Just a THOUGHT.
To think that we baulked at Durin's Door dactyls
----- Haiku'ed while sleeping
----- Or thanking our Primula
------Unloved we felt not.
Grudgingly picked at fresh 'inards or crusty
Hail! Fellowship of poetry.
Together we have grown.
Puter says no!
Re: Just a thought
Dr. G!Rhymester paternal
laughter eternal
Hear my applause
Through the round of guffaws!
Alcaics
You guys totally make my day 
Are we ready to add one more bit of wood to the fire? Here's one to makes you have to pay attention to your syllables and where they are stressed, but rhymes are completely optional.
Let's do a little jump down to Greece, with thanks to Lewis Turco and his poetic Book of Forms.
Alcaics is a accentual-syllabic Greek quatrain (four-line) stanza form.
Lines 1 & 2 are eleven syllables each, made up of:
An acephalous iamb. This means the word is 'headless' - merely a fancy way of saying that it is a lonely accented syllable with no unaccented head.
This 'headless' single syllable is followed by two trochees and two dactyls, in that order. (TA TA-ta TA-ta, TA-ta-ta TA-ta-ta)
Line 3 is nine syllables, made up of an acephalous iamb followed by four trochees. (TA TA-ta x 4)
Line 4 is 10 syllables: two dactyls followed by two trochees. (TA-ta-ta TA-ta-ta, TA-ta TA-ta)
There is no limit to the number of stanzas and no requirement to rhyme.
Diagrammed it would appear:
' | '~ | '~ | ' ~ ~ | ' ~ ~
x xx xx xxx xxx
' | '~ | '~ | ' ~ ~ | ' ~ ~
x xx xx xxx xxx
' | ' ~ | ' ~ | ' ~ | ' ~
x xx xx xx xx
' ~ ~ | ' ~ ~ | ' ~ | ' ~
xxx xxx xx xx
The only one I have done so far is a little cat bit (I ended up with a touch of rhyme anyway):
Tuna
O feline huntress stalking the tuna-can,
O rubbing dancer twining the opener,
I, bending downward, receive caress,
Purringly, eagerly, weakness confess.
Are we ready to add one more bit of wood to the fire? Here's one to makes you have to pay attention to your syllables and where they are stressed, but rhymes are completely optional.
Let's do a little jump down to Greece, with thanks to Lewis Turco and his poetic Book of Forms.
Alcaics is a accentual-syllabic Greek quatrain (four-line) stanza form.
Lines 1 & 2 are eleven syllables each, made up of:
An acephalous iamb. This means the word is 'headless' - merely a fancy way of saying that it is a lonely accented syllable with no unaccented head.
This 'headless' single syllable is followed by two trochees and two dactyls, in that order. (TA TA-ta TA-ta, TA-ta-ta TA-ta-ta)
Line 3 is nine syllables, made up of an acephalous iamb followed by four trochees. (TA TA-ta x 4)
Line 4 is 10 syllables: two dactyls followed by two trochees. (TA-ta-ta TA-ta-ta, TA-ta TA-ta)
There is no limit to the number of stanzas and no requirement to rhyme.
Diagrammed it would appear:
' | '~ | '~ | ' ~ ~ | ' ~ ~
x xx xx xxx xxx
' | '~ | '~ | ' ~ ~ | ' ~ ~
x xx xx xxx xxx
' | ' ~ | ' ~ | ' ~ | ' ~
x xx xx xx xx
' ~ ~ | ' ~ ~ | ' ~ | ' ~
xxx xxx xx xx
The only one I have done so far is a little cat bit (I ended up with a touch of rhyme anyway):
Tuna
O feline huntress stalking the tuna-can,
O rubbing dancer twining the opener,
I, bending downward, receive caress,
Purringly, eagerly, weakness confess.
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Beruthless
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Re: No head on four legs and someone cops the cannonball....
Nine hessian horse-thieves cannonball catering
All seemly creatures speedily scattering
Jack lantern kernels, thinly leering
Crickhollow Fredegar , legend living.
Or the Legend of Crickhollow
All seemly creatures speedily scattering
Jack lantern kernels, thinly leering
Crickhollow Fredegar , legend living.
Or the Legend of Crickhollow
Puter says no!
Re: No head on four legs and someone cops the cannonball....
But of course, as long as you're dealing with headless things... 
Lurtz, prideful, over-confident pursuer
So certain, thinking muscular savagery
All! Bearing weapons crudely fashioned,
Skewering - Suddenly ker-plop! Headless.
Lurtz, prideful, over-confident pursuer
So certain, thinking muscular savagery
All! Bearing weapons crudely fashioned,
Skewering - Suddenly ker-plop! Headless.
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Ringwraith-Wife
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Re: No head on four legs and someone cops the cannonball....
I'm going to try -- more headless stuff ---
Shire children at play in open fields, here, there
Among the cornstalks scarecrow stands tempting sweet
Ah, fresh pumpkinhead placed yesterday
It's sunwarmed odor them commands - Eating!
Shire children at play in open fields, here, there
Among the cornstalks scarecrow stands tempting sweet
Ah, fresh pumpkinhead placed yesterday
It's sunwarmed odor them commands - Eating!